Cherie Reich won the Crusaders’ first challenge and a critique of her query letter from me. Feel free to add to my critique, agree with it, or disagree. Reading is subjective and, to a certain extent, so is editing. Here is her original query and below it, the edited version.
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Here is the edited version:
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